Comments on: Is there something wrong with my resume?

By: stonerosedesigndotcom

stonerosedesigndotcom — Thu, 04 Feb 2010 21:01:59 +0000

It’s unreadable because it’s 10x too long…it’s a letter, not a resume. Remove the narrative and stick to the facts!

- Netel, Nov. 2003 – April 2004
- Customer Service Representative
- Trainer and Quality Assurance Monitor – Responsible for top-producing project, "Tel3Advantage.com"

THAT’S ALL!

•Skilled at organizing complex projects, defining project priorities, and delegating tasks.
•Possess excellent strong time management, organization and presentation skills.

BULL…if you possessed strong organizational and presentaiton skills why is your resume so long.

Keep your subjective claims off the resume…write a fantastic resume and it’s self-evident.
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By: Doctor J

Doctor J — Thu, 04 Feb 2010 20:56:59 +0000

I agree with several of the other responders:

1) It is TOO LONG and too wordy.

2) It needs serious grammar help.

Shorten it (cut it in half!) and clean up the grammar and you may see a much more positive response.

Best wishes and good luck.
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By: Oliver1010

Oliver1010 — Thu, 04 Feb 2010 20:14:59 +0000

I think it is too wordy. For the Netel job, it should be bullet points instead of that first paragraph. Ideally, it should be all bullet points. Leave the paragraphs for the cover letter. Also, I think the objective should be at the top.

Also there are a few errors in the resume. Here are some corrections:
"Monitor, record and give daily feedback to all representatives on my team."
"took notice of my leadership skills"
"•Compiled commission and entered data, computed, processed and paid out commissions earned weekly. "
"Called past AT&T customers and provided in depth reasons for returning …"
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By: information_police

information_police — Thu, 04 Feb 2010 20:06:59 +0000

Get someone to proofread it for you. First paragraph has several gramatical mistakes.

eg "Upper Management again took notice at my leadership skills" instead of "notice of my leadership"

I don’t like the excessive verbage about management taking notice, anyway. You don’t need to be so narrative. Nobody screening resumes wants to read that much. BULLET point things.

Keep working on it and get other people to read it.
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I screen LOTS of resumes.

By: VerryMerry

VerryMerry — Thu, 04 Feb 2010 20:00:59 +0000

If I were to receive a resume like this I would call you for an interview. The only thing I would change is the last bullet – Possess excellent strong time management – pick excellent or strong.
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